Better. Still needs work, though.
Ahhhh....no. Well, maybe. Ummmm....I have a pour waiting for the finishing touches but for some reason I keep getting drawn back to this project. Having tried to get some advice on the Wetcanvas.com Composition & Design forum(which was not forthcoming, btw) I finally got several responses in the Watercolor Studio forum, a few of which were very helpful. Someone from the Landscape forum(where I also posted my comp/color study) dropped by in the w/c studio, which I thought was really nice, to offer suggestions. I think I'm on a mission here, folks. I am apparently bent on pulling off this landscape. Please forgive the odd squiggle or the eraser crumbs. I wanted to get this up on the screen to see where I need to make any changes...or just start over, whichever the case may be.
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The critiques I received on the original comp/color study so far...the title is misleading, the palette I used is too 'brown'(I think that means boring), my comp is still leading the viewer's eye off the left side of the painting, the center of focus(the trilliums) are too far to the right and down and there's a disconnect between the foreground and the background. My goal...create a composition that holds the viewer's eye and lets it move through the painting, to add more light and drama, put more focus on the main subject while maintaining my concept and get my COI(center of interest) in the correct spot. I'll deal with the palette later. If anyone stopping by has any more input I'm all ears...or rather, eyes.
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Billie, I think the one right above the writing connects better as a whole but I feel the trillium are still not the center of attention, although I might be wrong. Finding a good focal point has never been my thing. I like where you are heading though, and I know you will come up with something fantastic.
Billie, forget what I said in the other comment, I like the one above, better. I guess it is always good to look twice. :)
Got it, Mary.:) I love your faith in me. I think the best solution lies between the two studies. What's working in one is missing from the other and vice versa.
Billie I know you are going to turn this into a lovely piece. I think you are right in finding a happy medium between the two - they both have strong points.
I agree, Anita. Or I may just go off in an entirely new direction. I never know until I do it.
Now I see what you were talking about in that thread. You might want to check out some landscapes by Xavier Swolfs, he gets some effects that might give you some ideas.
I took your suggestion and looked up Xavier's work, Nick. Wonderful landscapes! Very loosey, juicy and not your typical landscapes. I'm having a devil of a time loosening up and fear I'll produce the religious calendar look you mentioned.:( After looking at his work, then looking at what I've produced so far...man, oh man. I've got a loong way to go.
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